VeryPC (10th July 2013)
I feel I'm a little late to the chase here, I've read pretty much all of my opinions posted by other users!
This might just be me but one thing I would like to see more of is the roots of your business - you mention "The founders are 2 brothers and their
old university friend. From these close knit beginnings ...", I think more information regarding your growth from providing a local ICT service to a national PC manufacturer would be inspiring and help to portray a friendly image, separating yourselves the big money grabbers out there. While you have mentioned your "customer centric approach" throughout your brochure, a picture or two of your premises and friendly staff (hard at work of course) would help to visualise this. Also, the bloke in blue shouldn't thrust!! STOP IT!
On page 5, the "and the rest" text should not fade out.
In general the design is really nice.
Last edited by JJanisch; 9th July 2013 at 02:07 PM.
VeryPC (10th July 2013)
For the record, I'm no fan of Comic Sans either, but it's mainly because of the rampant overuse, rather than any inherent badness in the typeface itself - I think its visual appeal and legibility is what has led to it being used so much. If anything, I pity poor Comic Sans, a victim of its own success, punished for being pretty and friendly. There was a time when it had its place in a certain kind of childish/fun design, but decades of Powerpoint amateurs, lost cat posters, bad shop signs, takeaway menus and many many more communications than can ever be listed here mean that we just hate it whenever we see it, even when the usage is appropriate. We're probably just being snobs really - the people who still have the guts to use it should probably be applauded for not letting a fashionable opinion sway their selection.
Sheesh - I've never got that serious about Comic Sans before - I kinda feel like I should lead some sort of revival now, championing the virtues of a maligned innocent and leading it to a new generation of success. No, let me think... no, no I'm not going to do that.
Regarding the back story, it would be nice to go into more detail. When summarising all aspects of a company into a single concise document, getting all the facts on everything in there is pretty much impossible without making it far to long to be considered either concise or a summary any more. On review, we'll consider where perhaps too much detail on something important has been sacrificed for the sake of brevity, and where other aspects of the business may be condensible.
Getting feedback from you all in this thread has been an invaluable insight into how we should be pitching our communications and which kind of information you are more interested in - thanks everybody.
Sugar Mouses still up for grabs for new commenters remember - give us some feedback on the document linked in the original post and PM your details to me to claim. Those of you who have posted comments but not claimed yet - do so, and a sugary treat shall be yours!
Comic sans may be appropriate sometimes [which I doubt], but it's never appropriate for serious business.
I agree with @kearton about the logos. I have the PDF maxed out on a 27" screen and the text on the Windows 8 logo is still really small. [It doesn't help that it's pretty much a blue square]
Side note: I love your 403 forbidden page.
Last edited by X-13; 10th July 2013 at 12:04 PM.
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VeryPC (6th August 2013)
Last edited by VeryPC; 6th August 2013 at 12:46 PM.
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There is a branch in Bristol that might be useful to you: Find my Nearest Hancocks
You can pay a £1 day fee to drop in at your branch and buy what you want (at least that was an option at our branch in Sheffield).
If you want a Cash and Carry card to use the warehouse without the day fee, you need to be able to prove you are a business with bank statements/utility bills and there is a minimum £100 spend on first visit. We managed to load up well over this amount in future give-aways for promotions on EduGeek and treats for our staff. It is one of those eyes-bigger-than-your-stomach/wallet type places and restraint is needed to avoid the temptation of just buying one of everything!
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